Wednesday, April 27, 2016

Isik TS #8 with Michaella Malone

Tutoring Section 8 with Michaella
Date/Time: April 24, 2016/ 10:00 a.m.-11:00a.m.

Location: Starbucks near the Trader Joe’s on the Thomasville Road

Topic/Skill: Grammar and Descriptive Writing /The practice of descriptive writing

Feedback provided to tutee: In the descriptive writing, reader should be visualizing being in the moment of what I am describing.
-the purpose of describing a person, place, or thing
-must pay close attention to detail and should use your five senses
-use lots of adjectives!
Example:
The river was a fragile, universe-blue color, like the subtle sweep of a painter’s brush.

Lesson(s) about tutoring and/or the tutee you learned: I brainstormed for 5-10 minutes, and then I wrote this essay below:

“Jogging in the woods

Jogging is my favorite daily activity. In my busy schedule, I always find time to go out and the exercise. It refreshes my thoughts and ideas. It builds my muscles to be strong.
While I am jogging, I observe the nature; long and narrow pine, cheerful cardinals, playful squirrel, and even dears. The nature changes by seasons in the woods. The color changes on the leaves are spectacular in the fall. Some threes have several hues of yellow, red, and brown. I like to watch them while I am jogging.


In this beauty, when I see a dead squirrel, it is very disturbing. I start blaming careless and cruel drivers. I lose my concentration of jogging and worry about the creatures’ future in the wood, because cars are increasing in the subdivision. “

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